Re: (GRE Success! ) Is there something wrong with this sentence?

"Armed with this knowledge, I and a team of others here at EPA are
dedicated to feeding people, not landfills through the Sustainable
Materials Management Program’s (SMM) Food Recovery Challenge"

[1] there should be a comma after "not landfills".  Otherwise, it will seem
like the SMM Food Recovery Challenge is for the "landfills" part and not
for the "feeding people" part.

[2] "I and a team of others here" -- I would reconstruct this phrase to put
"I" at the end, say, "A team of members/locals/whoever here and I"



On Thu, Mar 28, 2013 at 1:56 AM, Kartik Datwani <[email protected]>wrote:

>
>
> Hi
>
> Armed with this knowledge, I and a team of others here at EPA are
> dedicated to feeding people[,] [and] not landfills through the Sustainable
> Materials Management Program’s <http://www.epa.gov/smm/> (SMM) Food
> Recovery Challenge <http://www.epa.gov/smm/foodrecovery/index.htm>. "
>
> The only error I can find is the one with the [,]. [and] should be used in
> place of [,].
>
> Please let me know if there are other errors.
> Thanks.
>
>
> On Fri, Sep 28, 2012 at 9:44 AM, Srihari Yamanoor <[email protected]>wrote:
>
>> **
>>
>>
>> Hello Everyone,
>>
>> Try to see if you sense a flaw, grammatical or syntactical in the
>> following sentence:
>>
>> "Armed with this knowledge, I and a team of others here at EPA are
>> dedicated to feeding people, not landfills through the Sustainable
>> Materials Management Program’s <http://www.epa.gov/smm/> (SMM) Food
>> Recovery Challenge <http://www.epa.gov/smm/foodrecovery/index.htm>. "
>>
>> Sincerely,
>>
>> Srihari
>>
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>
> Kartik Datwani
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> Vindhyachal Super Thermal Power Station
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>
> 
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