Re: (GRE Success! ) Is there something wrong with this sentence?

Well done! Either move the comma or add the article "and" as Kartik
suggested. The more grave error is as Raghu clearly points out in [2].

Sincerely,

Srihari


On Thu, Mar 28, 2013 at 7:17 AM, Raghu Rao <[email protected]> wrote:

> **
>
>
> "Armed with this knowledge, I and a team of others here at EPA are
> dedicated to feeding people, not landfills through the Sustainable
> Materials Management Program’s (SMM) Food Recovery Challenge"
>
> [1] there should be a comma after "not landfills".  Otherwise, it will
> seem like the SMM Food Recovery Challenge is for the "landfills" part and
> not for the "feeding people" part.
>
> [2] "I and a team of others here" -- I would reconstruct this phrase to
> put "I" at the end, say, "A team of members/locals/whoever here and I"
>
>
>
> On Thu, Mar 28, 2013 at 1:56 AM, Kartik Datwani <[email protected]>wrote:
>
>>
>>
>> Hi
>>
>> Armed with this knowledge, I and a team of others here at EPA are
>> dedicated to feeding people[,] [and] not landfills through the Sustainable
>> Materials Management Program’s <http://www.epa.gov/smm/> (SMM) Food
>> Recovery Challenge <http://www.epa.gov/smm/foodrecovery/index.htm>. "
>>
>> The only error I can find is the one with the [,]. [and] should be used
>> in place of [,].
>>
>> Please let me know if there are other errors.
>> Thanks.
>>
>>
>> On Fri, Sep 28, 2012 at 9:44 AM, Srihari Yamanoor <[email protected]>wrote:
>>
>>> **
>>>
>>>
>>> Hello Everyone,
>>>
>>> Try to see if you sense a flaw, grammatical or syntactical in the
>>> following sentence:
>>>
>>> "Armed with this knowledge, I and a team of others here at EPA are
>>> dedicated to feeding people, not landfills through the Sustainable
>>> Materials Management Program’s <http://www.epa.gov/smm/> (SMM) Food
>>> Recovery Challenge <http://www.epa.gov/smm/foodrecovery/index.htm>. "
>>>
>>> Sincerely,
>>>
>>> Srihari
>>>
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>>
>>
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>> With kind regards
>>
>> Kartik Datwani
>> Assistant Manager
>> Vindhyachal Super Thermal Power Station
>> NTPC Ltd.
>>
>>
>>
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