Re: [IPFIX] Review of draft-irtf-nmrg-location-ipfix-07.txt

PJ Aitken <[email protected]> Fri, 3 Mar 2017 11:26:23 +0000
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Great, thanks.

P.

On 03/03/17 11:17, Abdelkader Lahmadi wrote:
> Ok, more clear now.
> So, we work on a new text to resolve ALL the raised issues and send you a version.
>
> Best,
>> On 03 Mar 2017, at 12:07, PJ Aitken <[email protected]> wrote:
>>
>> Abdelkader, it was me who did the IE-doctors review. That's only concerned with the IANA request; it's not an IPFIX review of the document.
>>
>> P.
>>
>>
>> On 03/03/17 11:01, Abdelkader Lahmadi wrote:
>>> Hello,
>>> We haven’t really get a "proper review" of the document by IPFIX experts. Recently, we had a discussion with IANA and they asked IE-doctors to make a review, since that we received some points to be fixed regarding the proposed IE. I can forward to you the other comments from IE-doctors that we have received by IANA.
>>>
>>> Thank you for your comments, Ok we will fix the raised issues in the document.
>>> Best regards.
>>>
>>>
>>>> On 03 Mar 2017, at 11:42, PJ Aitken <[email protected]> wrote:
>>>>
>>>> Authors, has this document been reviewed by any IPFIX experts?
>>>>
>>>> I see a request on November 23rd, but no reviews. So let me sign up for that.
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> First, I took a quick look at the Figures in Appendix B:
>>>>
>>>> Figure 1: the Field Count should be 5, not 2.
>>>>
>>>> Figure 2: the size of the optional Padding field is wrong: the figure shows 9 bits rather than 8.
>>>>
>>>> Figure 4: the Length of 32 should be 28. The "geospatialLocationPosLat" Information Element isn't defined.
>>>>
>>>> Figure 5: the Field Count of 2 should be 3.
>>>>
>>>> Figure 7: The "geospatialLocationPostLng" and "geospatialLocationtLng" Information Elements aren't defined.
>>>>
>>>> Figure 9: The sizes of the "CivicValue" data fields are not shown correctly. eg, "Inria Nancy-Grand Est" is depicted in 6 octets when it should contain 21. Therefore the Figure is misleading and difficult to understand; it is not a good example. Please redraw the figure correctly. Please mark the variable-lengths eg "vlen = 21".
>>>>
>>>> Figure 11:
>>>>     The Set IDs (311, 312, 313) do not correspond to the Template IDs in Figure 10 (306, 307, 308).
>>>>     Again, the "Inria Nancy-Grand Grand Est" field is depicted in 6 octets rather than the requisite 27. Without the repeated "Grand", the 21 would be correct. Please write "vlen=21"
>>>>     The "Civic location Attr length" of 25 seems wrong.
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> This document is not ready for publication. Please post an updated version so I can check that all the IPFIX details are correct.
>>>>
>>>> Thanks,
>>>> P.
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    Great, thanks.<br>
    <br>
    P.<br>
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    <div class="moz-cite-prefix">On 03/03/17 11:17, Abdelkader Lahmadi
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      <pre wrap="">Ok, more clear now.
So, we work on a new text to resolve ALL the raised issues and send you a version.

Best,
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        <pre wrap="">On 03 Mar 2017, at 12:07, PJ Aitken <a class="moz-txt-link-rfc2396E" href="mailto:[email protected]">&lt;[email protected]&gt;</a> wrote:

Abdelkader, it was me who did the IE-doctors review. That's only concerned with the IANA request; it's not an IPFIX review of the document.

P.


On 03/03/17 11:01, Abdelkader Lahmadi wrote:
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          <pre wrap="">Hello,
We haven’t really get a "proper review" of the document by IPFIX experts. Recently, we had a discussion with IANA and they asked IE-doctors to make a review, since that we received some points to be fixed regarding the proposed IE. I can forward to you the other comments from IE-doctors that we have received by IANA.

Thank you for your comments, Ok we will fix the raised issues in the document.
Best regards.


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            <pre wrap="">On 03 Mar 2017, at 11:42, PJ Aitken <a class="moz-txt-link-rfc2396E" href="mailto:[email protected]">&lt;[email protected]&gt;</a> wrote:

Authors, has this document been reviewed by any IPFIX experts?

I see a request on November 23rd, but no reviews. So let me sign up for that.


First, I took a quick look at the Figures in Appendix B:

Figure 1: the Field Count should be 5, not 2.

Figure 2: the size of the optional Padding field is wrong: the figure shows 9 bits rather than 8.

Figure 4: the Length of 32 should be 28. The "geospatialLocationPosLat" Information Element isn't defined.

Figure 5: the Field Count of 2 should be 3.

Figure 7: The "geospatialLocationPostLng" and "geospatialLocationtLng" Information Elements aren't defined.

Figure 9: The sizes of the "CivicValue" data fields are not shown correctly. eg, "Inria Nancy-Grand Est" is depicted in 6 octets when it should contain 21. Therefore the Figure is misleading and difficult to understand; it is not a good example. Please redraw the figure correctly. Please mark the variable-lengths eg "vlen = 21".

Figure 11:
   The Set IDs (311, 312, 313) do not correspond to the Template IDs in Figure 10 (306, 307, 308).
   Again, the "Inria Nancy-Grand Grand Est" field is depicted in 6 octets rather than the requisite 27. Without the repeated "Grand", the 21 would be correct. Please write "vlen=21"
   The "Civic location Attr length" of 25 seems wrong.


This document is not ready for publication. Please post an updated version so I can check that all the IPFIX details are correct.

Thanks,
P.
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