RE: Updates to draft-ietf-ips-iscsi-nodearch-key-00.txt

Quick note: -00 is what's currently on the Internet-Draft servers, so
the final form of this -01 is headed for submission after the Montreal
meetings.  In the meeting, I intend to project at least what I consider
the crucial paragraphs for detailed editing/wordsmithing:
- Last paragraph of Section 1.2, forbidding behavioral dependencies
- First paragraph of the security section on what to do if there's
	a need to keep implementation details secret.
Dave W took the latter paragraph directly from an email I sent, so
blame me rather than him for any problems with that text.

The -01 version of this draft is probably headed for WG Last Call
within the next few weeks.

Thanks,
--David

> -----Original Message-----
> From: David Wysochanski [mailto:[email protected]] 
> Sent: Friday, July 07, 2006 2:43 PM
> To: [email protected]
> Subject: [Ips] Updates to draft-ietf-ips-iscsi-nodearch-key-00.txt
> 
> Attached is an updated version of 
> draft-ietf-ips-iscsi-nodearch-key which
> addresses all of the remaining items on my list.  Comments welcome.
> Note that I will not be attending the Montreal meeting.  However, my
> colleage, Tom Talpey should be in attendance.
> 
> Significant changes are:
> 
> 1. p. 2. Updated usage paragraph.  This seemed a little 
> vague, so I tried
> to make it more specific and focus on prevention of the 
> previous problem
> with JavaScript.  I also loosened the requirement for setting the key
> value automatically to a SHOULD instead of a MUST (based on 
> another reviewer
> comment).
> 
> 2.  p. 4. Security updates related to logging and different levels of
> risk for nodes.  These ideas came from a computer security reviewer,
> and I believe address important issues.
> 
> List of all changes (verified via RFC diff tool below)
> draft-ietf-ips-iscsi-nodearch-key-00.txt
> draft-ietf-ips-iscsi-nodearch-key-01r1.txt
> - p. 2: Modified proper use paragraph
> - p. 3: fix typeo
> - p. 4: fix typeo
> - p. 4: added paragraphs 3-5
> - p. 8: added another contributor
> 
> http://www1.tools.ietf.org/tools/rfcdiff/rfcdiff.pyht
> 
> 
> 

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