AD review for draft-ietf-ips-isns-mib-10

Hi,

below is the AD review for draft-ietf-ips-isns-mib-10. This document  
is basically ready to go, modulo a few editing nits. Nice job!

Lars


INTRODUCTION, paragraph 12:
 >    This memo is a product of the IP Storage (IPS) working group  
within
 >    the Internet Engineering Task Force.  Comments are solicited and
 >    should be addressed to the working group's mailing list at
 >    [email protected] and/or the authors.

   Suggest to move the first sentence of this paragraph to the
   acknowledgments section and remove the second sentence altogether.


Section 4., paragraph 2:
 >    "SHOULD", "SHOULD NOT", "RECOMMENDED",  "MAY", and "OPTIONAL" in

   Nit: s/,  "MAY"/, "MAY"/ to make idnits happy


Section 5., paragraph 27:
 >        of DD's and DDS's, SNMP may be used to modify them via

   Nit: s/DD's/DDs/ Nit: s/DDS's,/DDSs,/


Section 5., paragraph 28:
 >                0       SNMP protocol is allowed to modify
 >                        DD's/DDS's

   Nit: s|DD's/DDS's|DDs/DDSs|


Section 5., paragraph 31:
 >       "The identifer for the unique integer Entity Index

   Nit: s/identifer/identifier/


Section 5., paragraph 37:
 >               30       1 = IKE/IPSec Enabled; 0 = IKE/IPSec

   Nit: s/IPSec/IPsec/g


Section 5., paragraph 43:
 >        object.  The definitiions of each setting are defined in

   Nit: s/definitiions/definitions/


Section 5., paragraph 55:
 >        object.  The definitiions of each setting are defined in

   Nit: s/definitiions/definitions/


Section 5., paragraph 87:
 >        when registerd in the iSNS Server instance. Either the

   Nit: s/registerd/registered/


Section 5., paragraph 156:
 >        iSCSI node name MUST be indentical in all DDs, and is

   Nit: s/indentical/identical/


Section 5., paragraph 162:
 >        is only done when a specific set of portals are prefered

   Nit: s/prefered/preferred/


Section 5., paragraph 195:
 >       "The iSNS Management IP Address for the registred Entity

   Nit: s/registred/registered/


Section 5., paragraph 197:
 >       "The iSNS Entity Registration Timestamp for the registred

   Nit: s/registred/registered/


Section 5., paragraph 297:
 >        regisered in the iSNS."

   Nit: s/regisered/registered/


-- 
Lars Eggert                                     NEC Network Laboratories

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