Re: kerberos-referrals-13 - text clarification needed

On 03/06/2012 11:01 AM, Sam Hartman wrote:
>     Zhanna> this ticket.  There is a degree of trust of the issuing
>     Zhanna> realm by the consuming realm implicit in this relationship."
>     Zhanna> Would it be possible to clarify the last sentence?
> 
> The intent was that the entire rest of the section served to clarify the
> summary given in the first paragraph.

The clauses can be a little difficult to parse out.  I suggest
s/implicit in this relationship/implied by this relationship/.

>     Zhanna> Then, later in this section "Creating a cross-realm
>     Zhanna> relationship implies relatively little inherent trust in the
>     Zhanna> issuing realm.  Significant trust only applies as principals
>     Zhanna> dependent on that issuing realm are given access to
>     Zhanna> resources.  However, two deployment constraints may imply
>     Zhanna> significantly greater trust is implied by the initial
>     Zhanna> cross-realm relationship." - the last sentence needs clearer
>     Zhanna> wording, I think.
> 
> Could you try to explain what is unclear about it or propose an
> alternate wording?

"X may imply Y is implied by Z" is tough to understand.  I suggest
"However, two deployment constraints may increase the trust implied by
the cross-realm relationship."

Also, it's not clear that the subsequent items are really "constraints".
 Perhaps "deployment characteristics" would be better.
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