[openpgp] Re: Gorry Fairhurst's No Objection on draft-ietf -openpgp-pqc-14: (with COMMENT)

On 15/12/2025 16:21, Aron Wussler wrote:
> Hi Gorry,
>
> Thank you as well for the review!
> We've collected the feedback and made a PR [1] with the changes.
>
>
>> 1) Please reword "we..." in 2 places, because the IETF is the publisher:
>> "We refer to Section 10.1..." to something like: "Please see Section 10.1..."
>> "In this section we define the encryption..." to something like "This sectio
>> defines the encryption..."
> First occurrence is fixed here, second is already being fixed in Éric's review [2].
>
>> 2) This text seems like it has too many "to"s for easy reading:
>> ...MAY by default encrypt to both to avoid disruption to communications...
> I simplified the sentence trying to maintain the meaning.
>
>> 3) I feel slightly uncomfortable reading, could this be reworded?:
>> "This means that all component signatures must be verified
>> successfully in order to achieve"
>> - Using "in order" within a sentence can result in ambiguity about whether this
>> implies ordered processing of the signatures.
> I think that's a leftover from us non-native speakers :)
> I just removed the "in order" and it should be fine.
>   
> Cheers,
> Aron
>
> [1] https://github.com/openpgp-pqc/draft-openpgp-pqc/pull/258
> [2] https://github.com/openpgp-pqc/draft-openpgp-pqc/pull/253
>
> --
> Aron Wussler
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Sounds good, thanks for your prompt reply.

Gorry

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