RE: Review comments from Basavaraj Patel on CTP

[email protected] Fri, 24 Oct 2003 18:05:32 +0300
Newsgroups gmane.ietf.seamoby
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> Editorial:
> 
> 1. Can the problem description text in the Introduction be a
>    subsection? The current Into section begins with a reference to a
>    problem statement described in RFC3374. 
>    Nit: The open quote "Problem... in Section 1 is not terminated.

Done
 
> 2. s/This section provides a protocol overview/This section provides the
>    CT protocol overview.

Done

> 3. Section 2: (References)
>    "In response to a CT-Activate Request message or to the CT trigger, pAR
>    predictively transmits a Context Transfer Data (CTD) message that
>    contains feature contexts.  This message, described in Section
>    2.4.2"
>    Incorrect reference.
> 
>    "In the second scenario, pAR receives a Context Transfer Request (CT
>    Request) described in Section 2.4.5, message from nAR."
>    Incorrect reference; Should be 2.4.6
> 
>    Nit: Check all references

Done
  
> 4. Section 2:
>    "[1].* contexts, pAR verifies authorization token before  transmitting
>    the [2]algorithm [3] When context transfer takes place without the
>    nAR requesting it (scenario one above), nAR requires MN to present
>    its authorization token"
>    
>    I could not make out what this statement says. I am not even sure
>    if the authors can understand it.

Done, I've deleted it, based upon reorganizing some of the text

> 5. Section 2:
>    Can you create subsections for scenarios 1 and 2? Would make it
>    easier to reference.

done.

> 6. s/Additially/Additionally

 Done

> 7. Section 2.3
>    a. Would be good to describe each field separately. Goes for all
>    subsequent sections where message formats are described.
>      CXT Type - 
>      Length   - 
>      P bit    -

Will do

>    b. "When the presence vector is in use, the Presentation Vector is
>    interpreted.."
>    What is this Presentation vector? (Typo)

fixed

>    c. Last paragraph has % chars

done

> 8. Sec 2.4.1
>    "If an acknowledgement for this message is needed, the MN sets the
>    A flag to 1, "
>
>    Missing "A" flag in CTAR.

Fixed, it was listed as R
 
> 9.  Sec 2.4.2
>     Describe the fields.

Will do

> 10. Is there a need for specifying the status codes used in CTDR and CTAA? 

Will do.

John