RE: Edit/Approval - Camelbak Chute 1L - Kathy Waters

"'Kathy Waters' kathy-UFS7mITjnAiGkU+Z+ufpa1aTQe2KTcn/@public.gmane.org [BackpackGearTest]" <[email protected]>
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Richard,

 

Made the suggested edits, deleted the test file and uploaded.

 

Thanks for your work on this one as well!

 

Kathy

 

From: [email protected] [mailto:[email protected]] 
Sent: Sunday, November 23, 2014 8:37 AM
To: [email protected]
Subject: [BackpackGearTest] Edit/Approval - Camelbak Chute 1L - Kathy Waters

 






Kathy,

 

Edits below in the standard EDIT/Edit/Comment format. After revising upload to http://tinyurl.com/knxdgbj

 

Cheers, Richard

 

### This tether keeps the cap attached to the bottle so it doesn't get lost and forms a convenient, comfortable carry handle. The cap opens (and closes) with just a half a turn and threads internally ###
Edit: Drop an "a" – "just half a turn" or "just a half-turn"

 

 

### I have used it on every outing I've made in the last 2 months ###
Edit: two months

 

###This is great for me, but I have a tendency to drop things and my butter-fingers have led to the tossing of a few water bottles which went topless in the field. ###

Edit: A bit confusing, cleared up if you substitute "as" for "but."

 

###I'm always on the look-out for the next new-and-improved water bottle. ###
Edit: lookout [one word, no hyphen]
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