Edit/Approval - Purple Rain Skirt - Gail Staisil

"[email protected] [BackpackGearTest]" <[email protected]> 22 Jul 2016 07:24:36 -0700
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Hi Gail,
  
 Thanks for the OR, which definitely earns a Brownie Point. Edits below in the standard EDIT/Edit/Comment format. After revising you may upload to http://tinyurl.com/z5oh6uf
  
 Cheers, Richard
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 ### Manufacturer
 Purple Rain ###
 EDIT: Purple Rain Adventure Skirts
  
 ### Size and Color
 L (available in sizes S-XL)
 Black (also available in Olive and Teal)###
 Edit/Comment: Somewhere in your Review consider adding your standard dress size and commenting on whether you think Purple Rain sizes small, large, or normal. I do this by adding the relevant measurement to my profile, but in the text is also OK.
  
 ### It is often paired up with a pair of full-length tights, capri tights, long underwear and even bike shorts. ###
 EDIT: Capri [With an initial cap]
 Edit: Consider adding "one or more" after "with" and change "and" to "or." I doubt that you wear all the others at the same time. 
  
 There are two different offerings from Purple Rain with the
 other being a hiking kilt but my guess is that the Adventure
 Skirt is the most popular. ###
 EDIT: This is projection, as you acknowledge ("my guess"). End the sentence at "kilt" or indicate that the skirt is more popular with you, if you've tried the kilt.
  
 ### in the state of Michigan, but I have also worn it for a trip in the Pacific Northwest (State of Washington) as well as in the states of Wisconsin and Minnesota. Elevation was from 600 ft (183 m) to 7800 ft (2377 m). ###
 Edit: Any reason Washington is favored with a capitalized "State?" Be consistent – all "state" or "State."
  
 ### I love the length of the skirt as it provides enough coverage when wearing it alone but also lends itself well to wearing with all the aforementioned bottom layers.###
 Edit: As above. "any of the aforementioned" would be more accurate.
  
 ### but also spring cross country skiing and trail running.###
 Edit: cross-country [with a hyphen]