[manet] Mahesh Jethanandani's Discuss on draft-ietf-manet-dl ep-traffic-classification-13: (with DISCUSS and COMMENT)

Mahesh Jethanandani has entered the following ballot position for
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DISCUSS:
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"Abstract", paragraph 0
>    This document defines a new Data Item for the Dynamic Link Exchange
>    Protocol (DLEP) to support traffic classification.  Traffic
>    classification information identifies traffic flows based on frame/
>    packet content such as destination address.  The Data Item is defined
>    in an extensible and reusable fashion.  Its use will be mandated in
>    other documents defining specific DLEP extensions.  This document
>    also introduces DLEP Sub-Data Items, and Sub-Data Items are defined
>    to support DiffServ and Ethernet traffic classification.

I would note that both RTGDIR and TSVART's early review of the document had
issues with the document. However, I did not see a Last Call or Telechat review
of the same. But this could easily have been missed because there are four
documents, and some of these issues could have been debated as part of the
other documents. Even otherwise, there is no e-mail thread that I could find
that discusses how the issues were resolved. In either case, it would be nice
to know from the Shepherd that the issues raised by David Black were addressed,
and more specifically how they were addressed.


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COMMENT:
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NIT
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All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to
address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there
will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you
did with these suggestions.


Section 2, paragraph 2
> fic Classification Data Item This sections defines the Traffic Classification
>                                   ^^^^^^^^
Consider using the singular form after the singular determiner "This".

Section 6.2, paragraph 1
> ritical to the acceptance of DLEP. We morn his passing on November 23, 2023.
>                                    ^^^^^^^
s/morn/mourn/



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