Re: [needs proofread & IT translation] Refund4Freedom news item

Ciao Gabri,

grazie del feedback, molto utile.

I attach the revised translation of the postcard which includes your 
suggestions 🙂

I left my comments below everyone is encouraged to continue the 
conversation - @Dario se hai piacere a dare feedback anche tu.

I'd like to wrap it up by _tomorrow morning (Wednesday 9am) latest_.

Thank you

Marta


Il 26/05/25 19:47, Gabriele Ponzo ha scritto:
> "Dispositivi come laptop e smartphone": I would better write 
> "Dispositivi come PC portatili e smartphone" or even better 
> "Dispositivi come PC (portatili o meno) e smartphone" which in english 
> would be "Devices like PCs or laptops and smartphones"


Marta: I agree would be better to use PC instead of Laptop

here the difference among the 2

PC a general-purpose computer equipped with a microprocessor and 
designed to run especially commercial software (such as a word processor 
or Internet browser) for an individual user by Merriam-Webster dictionary

Laptop a portable microcomputer having its main components (such as 
processor, keyboard, and display screen) integrated into a single unit 
capable of battery-powered operation by Merriam-Webster dictionary

As you can see laptop is much more specific.


>
> Moreover I'd probably add an example because not everyone knows what a 
> software and an operating system is...
> Something like: "You wouldn't accept a car with a guest inside, right?".


this is a very good point, but the space for examples in this postcard 
is very limited - to consider for the future.


>
> Finally, "start up the pc and take pictures", correctly translated in 
> "Avvia il PC e scatta delle foto" doesn't describe what to take 
> pictures of.
> I'd better write "start up the pc and take pictures or a video to 
> document your refusal of the proposed End User License Agreement", 
> translated in "Avvia il PC e scatta delle foto o fai dei video per 
> documentare il tuo rifiuto della licenza proposta (End User License 
> Agreement)".


what about this? "Take a Picture or Video of the Refund Clause" / "Fai 
una foto o un video della clausola di rimborso che ti appare sullo schermo"


>
> My 2 cents ;)
> Have a good evening dearests.
> ---
> Gabriele Ponzo
>
>
> Il giorno lun 26 mag 2025 alle ore 18:15 Marta Andreoli 
> <[email protected]> ha scritto:
>
>     Hi all,
>
>     attached the text of the postcard translated in italian for you to
>     proofread.
>
>     Please do let me know if you have comments or make them in the file
>
>     Thanks
>
>     Marta
>
>
>     Il 26/05/25 13:03, Dario Presutti ha scritto:
>     > Hi all,
>     >
>     > On 26.05.25 12:17, Ana Galan wrote:
>     >
>     >> The IT translation is also ready for proofread:
>     >> https://webpreview.fsfe.org/cgi/fsfe.pl?pad=1464
>     > Sorry, there was a misunderstanding between And and me. This is
>     just
>     > the automatic translation. I will follow-up on this list again
>     with a
>     > ready to be proofread version by EOB today.
>     >
>     > Best,
>     > Dario
>     >
>     >
>     >> Dear all,
>     >>
>     >> due to some issues with the webpreview, the English version is now
>     >> here: https://webpreview.fsfe.org/cgi/fsfe.pl?pad=1465
>     >>
>     >> We will need to add an extra paragraph so I will send you another
>     >> mail later today with the xhtml update. That pad will also be
>     updated
>     >> later with the new paragraph
>     >>
>     >> (I just wanted to make sure you are not currently looking for
>     it and
>     >> you cannot find it)
>     >>
>     >> The IT translation is also ready for proofread:
>     >> https://webpreview.fsfe.org/cgi/fsfe.pl?pad=1464
>     >>
>     >> Best,
>     >>
>     >> Ana
>     >>
>     >>
>     >> On 5/23/25 09:46, Ana Galan wrote:
>     >>> Dear all,
>     >>>
>     >>> next week  (Thursday) we have the kick-off event of the
>     initiative
>     >>> Refund4Freedom and therefore, we wrote a news item about it. 
>     I am
>     >>> kindly asking for your help with English proofread and, as it
>     is an
>     >>> IT initiative, an IT translation.
>     >>>
>     >>> It would be great to have it done by next Tuesday evening.
>     >>>
>     >>> As usual, you can find the xhtml file attached and the English
>     >>> version in the webpreview:
>     >>> https://webpreview.fsfe.org/cgi/fsfe.pl?pad=1463
>     >>>
>     >>> Thanks a lot and have a great weekend,
>     >>>
>     >>> Ana
>     >>
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