Re: [needs proofread & translation] July newsletter

Luca Bonissi <[email protected]> Mon, 7 Jul 2025 21:08:33 +0200
Newsgroups	gmane.org.fsf.europe.translators
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Hello Richard!

Many thanks for proofreading the July newsletter!

Mostly of the changes you suggested were updated in webpreview (reverted 
English version...). You can see differences from the following link 
(unfortunately, ALT are not diff-ed, but you see them by moving the 
mouse cursor over the image):

https://webpreview.fsfe.org/cgi/fsfe.pl?pad=1494&diff=1/0

XHTML source file attached. If you prefer, you can also update directly 
the text in webpreview by clicking on "Proofread/Translate" and then 
"EDIT current review" (the text will be automatically saved every minute).

I highlight relevant changes and/or doubt:

On 07/07/25 07:20, Richard L. Schmeidler wrote:
> 1.  Alt text of first picture:  "Collage of pictures showing a team
> picure with FSFE volunteers"  Replace "picure" with "picture."

Thanks for spotting the typo. Fixed also in the ALT text of the last 
<image/> tag (thumbnail picture)

> 5.  Alt text of second picture:  "White men posing showing Ada and
> Zangemann in Danish."
> 
> (a)  I assume that you have some reason for specifying that the men
> are all White men, so I am not suggesting changing that, although --
> especially in a Scandinavian context -- it seems unnecessary to me to
> specify their racial identity.

Also from my point of view specifying "White" seems unnecessary and - at 
least in Italian translation - it sounds very strange... Maybe it is 
better to remove "White", but I left it in the text.

> 8.  "followed by a Q&A and debate with the author, FSFE president
> Matthias Kirschner.The book was officially published"
> 
> (a)  This is not a suggestion or an objection, but I am curious what
> the debate was about.  Was it about the efficacy of grass-roots
> activism?  Was it about the young age of the protagonist?  Something
> else?  Also, a debate is a very formal kind of a discussion.  Who took
> the role of disagreeing with the President of the FSFE on this
> celebratory occasion?

I don't know... maybe "debate" should be replaced with "discussion"?

> 10.  "as well as amazing food and Italian home-made ice cream!"  I am
> not suggesting any changes, but there are several nuances of English
> (or at least my US English) usage that I want to point out here.
> 
> [...]
> 
> Similarly, the positioning of "Italian" before "homemade" rather than
> before "ice cream" suggests that this ice cream was made in an Italian
> home (not, for example, in the home of an Italian living in Germany)
> rather than being ice cream in the Italian style.

The ice-cream was made in my Italian home and transported to Berlin with 
my electric car that provided 230 V AC to the freezer during the trip.

So, placing "Italian" before "homemade" is correct in this context :-)


Many thanks again!
   Luca

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