Re: [needs proofread & translation] DMA one year review

Having already sent an immediate response with my proofreading, here is a
version of the xhtml from the English version that reflects my suggestions.

I note two errors I made.  My suggested rewriting in my first #3 is to
replace "is no longer exempt of keeping" (not just "may no longer keep").
And, obviously, I erred in my numbering.  I am sorry for both errors.  I
was in a hurry.

On Tue, Sep 23, 2025 at 7:37 AM Richard L. Schmeidler <
[email protected]> wrote:

> This is a "first minute" response to your last minute request.  I have
> very little to suggest, mostly some corrections of English usage.  Whoever
> drafted and reviewed this did a much better job than is usual in FSFE news
> items.
>
> 1.  "In our input to the European Commission’s public consultation we
> welcome the DMA as a milestone in regulating large tech corporations but we
> stress the hurdles and challenges for making Device Neutrality a reality."
> Insert a comma after "corporations."  English grammar.
>
> 2.  "We got involved since the very beginning, paving the way for Free
> Software to be considered a central topic in the DMA enforcement."
>
> (a)  I suggest replacing "since" with "from."  English usage.
>
> (b)  Remove the second "the" (before "DMA")  English usage.
>
> 3.  "With the DMA, big tech is no longer exempt of keeping European
> citizens and consumers in lock-ins, hampering interoperability and denying
> software freedom."  I suggest rewriting, replacing "exempt of keeping"
> with "may no longer keep."  Other rewritings are possible.  The problem is
> two-fold.  First, English usage requires "exempt from" rather than "exempt
> of."  But more important, "exempt" is the wrong word.  To exempt is to free
> from an obligation or liability.  Big tech was not subject to the
> obligations imposed by the DMA until the DMA came into force.
>
> 3.  "and contributed to formal complaint defending the right to uninstall
> apps in Android."  Insert "a" before "formal."  English grammar (although I
> cannot specify a rule that says why an article is necessary here).
>
> 4.  "Not only big tech has been trying to hinder the law by any means"
> Rewrite "big tech has" as "has big tech."  English usage.
>
> 5.  "we have kept a closer look on how the European Commission has been
> implemented the law."
>
> (a)  Replace "closer" with "close."  There is no comparison described.
>
> (b)   Remove "been" English grammar.
>
> 6.  "The FSFE insists that interoperability must not be reduced to a
> request-based process but should be interoperability by design, open,
> transparent, and free of gatekeeper discretion."  I suggest replacing the
> comma after "design" with a colon.  The sentence as it stands is not wrong,
> but I like my somewhat restructured version better.
>
> 7.  "the EU Commission should not allow gatekeepers to impose restrictive
> and unnecessary burdens to smaller and Free Software developers."  Replace
> the second occurrence of "to" (after "burdens") with "on."  English usage.
>
> On Tue, Sep 23, 2025 at 6:27 AM Ana Galan <[email protected]> wrote:
>
>> Dear all,
>>
>> this is a last minute request as we were working on this news item until
>> today and we want to publish it tomorrow.
>>
>> The good news is that we have already translated it into Spanish, Italian
>> and French ! So it would be great if anyone can proofread those versions.
>>
>> Here you can find all:
>>
>> English version: https://webpreview.fsfe.org/cgi/fsfe.pl?pad=1534
>>
>> French version: https://webpreview.fsfe.org/cgi/fsfe.pl?pad=1536
>>
>> Italian version:https://webpreview.fsfe.org/cgi/fsfe.pl?pad=1533
>>
>> Spanish version: https://webpreview.fsfe.org/cgi/fsfe.pl?pad=1535
>>
>>
>> Best regards,
>>
>> Ana
>>
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