Re: [needs proofread & translation] DMA one year review

Dear Richard,

thank you for your first minute proofreading! This is very much appreciated.

Best regards,
Dario

On 23.09.25 14:02, Richard L. Schmeidler wrote:
> Having already sent an immediate response with my proofreading, here 
> is a version of the xhtml from the English version that reflects my 
> suggestions.
>
> I note two errors I made.  My suggested rewriting in my first #3 is to 
> replace "is no longer exempt of keeping" (not just "may no longer 
> keep").  And, obviously, I erred in my numbering.  I am sorry for both 
> errors.  I was in a hurry.
>
> On Tue, Sep 23, 2025 at 7:37 AM Richard L. Schmeidler 
> <[email protected]> wrote:
>
>     This is a "first minute" response to your last minute request.  I
>     have very little to suggest, mostly some corrections of English
>     usage.  Whoever drafted and reviewed this did a much better job
>     than is usual in FSFE news items.
>
>     1.  "In our input to the European Commission’s public consultation
>     we welcome the DMA as a milestone in regulating large tech
>     corporations but we stress the hurdles and challenges for making
>     Device Neutrality a reality."  Insert a comma after
>     "corporations."  English grammar.
>
>     2.  "We got involved since the very beginning, paving the way for
>     Free Software to be considered a central topic in the DMA
>     enforcement."
>
>     (a)  I suggest replacing "since" with "from." English usage.
>
>     (b)  Remove the second "the" (before "DMA")  English usage.
>
>     3.  "With the DMA, big tech is no longer exempt of keeping
>     European citizens and consumers in lock-ins, hampering
>     interoperability and denying software freedom."  I suggest
>     rewriting, replacing "exempt of keeping"  with "may no longer
>     keep."  Other rewritings are possible.  The problem is two-fold. 
>     First, English usage requires "exempt from" rather than "exempt
>     of." But more important, "exempt" is the wrong word.  To exempt is
>     to free from an obligation or liability.  Big tech was not subject
>     to the obligations imposed by the DMA until the DMA came into force.
>
>     3.  "and contributed to formal complaint defending the right to
>     uninstall apps in Android."  Insert "a" before "formal."  English
>     grammar (although I cannot specify a rule that says why an article
>     is necessary here).
>
>     4.  "Not only big tech has been trying to hinder the law by any
>     means"  Rewrite "big tech has" as "has big tech."  English usage.
>
>     5.  "we have kept a closer look on how the European Commission has
>     been implemented the law."
>
>     (a)  Replace "closer" with "close."  There is no comparison described.
>
>     (b)   Remove "been" English grammar.
>
>     6.  "The FSFE insists that interoperability must not be reduced to
>     a request-based process but should be interoperability by design,
>     open, transparent, and free of gatekeeper discretion."  I suggest
>     replacing the comma after "design" with a colon.  The sentence as
>     it stands is not wrong, but I like my somewhat restructured
>     version better.
>
>     7.  "the EU Commission should not allow gatekeepers to impose
>     restrictive and unnecessary burdens to smaller and Free Software
>     developers."  Replace the second occurrence of "to" (after
>     "burdens") with "on."  English usage.
>
>     On Tue, Sep 23, 2025 at 6:27 AM Ana Galan <[email protected]> wrote:
>
>         Dear all,
>
>         this is a last minute request as we were working on this news
>         item until today and we want to publish it tomorrow.
>
>         The good news is that we have already translated it into
>         Spanish, Italian and French ! So it would be great if anyone
>         can proofread those versions.
>
>         Here you can find all:
>
>         English version: https://webpreview.fsfe.org/cgi/fsfe.pl?pad=1534
>
>         French version: https://webpreview.fsfe.org/cgi/fsfe.pl?pad=1536
>
>         Italian version:https://webpreview.fsfe.org/cgi/fsfe.pl?pad=1533
>
>         Spanish version: https://webpreview.fsfe.org/cgi/fsfe.pl?pad=1535
>
>
>         Best regards,
>
>         Ana
>
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